Week 13 Story- Lunchtime Escape
Lunchtime Escape
There once was a young boy, around the age of seven who had the hardest time making friends. Everyday he would head to school yearning to meet a new classmate so they could play at lunch. Though sadly the boy’s classmates thought less of him and did everything to ignore him. This weighed on the young boy's heart, all he wanted was a companion.
After weeks of trying to make friends the boy finally gave up. That day instead of sitting alone at lunch he snuck into the woods behind the school. He found the animals and nature he saw intriguing. This became his new lunchtime escape. Everyday at lunch he would travel further and further into the woods. All until one day he stumbled upon a hidden door in a tree.
At first he was scared, but at second glance he realized it was just an ordinary door. He knew lunch would be ending soon, but he was so intrigued that he knocked. A boy about his same age answered. The boy was shocked, he could not believe what he was seeing.
The boy who answered the door announced his name was Jack and asked what the boy was doing so far out in the woods. The boy answered explaining his desire for friends and play. Jack responded and said, “from here on everyday come to this door and we can play.” The boy was thrilled but a little nervous. He ran back to school and with much excitement told his classmates. Barely any of them listened, and the ones that did, did not believe him.
The boy was determined to become friends with Jack. So the next day he raced out to the hidden door. Jack answered promptly and the two played.
As the years passed the boy and Jack would become best friends. Partaking in sports, telling each other stories, and sharing their experiences from the much different worlds they lived in.
Author's Notes
I created this story based off of the story of Elidore. In that story a young boy finds a hidden world where he goes to play everyday. Though in that tale it ends very sad. He abuses the opportunity he was given. So in my story I changed the story line a little. I wanted the young boy in my story to end up being happy. It is so often we hear about how hards kids can be on one another. We are all unique and different. For this young boy, Jack was everything he needed to break out of his shell and become his own.
Bibliography
More Celtic Fairy Tales by Joseph Jacobs with illustrations by John D. Batten (1895).
Photo provided by: That One Adventure Couple
Hey, Cade
ReplyDeleteI really like the modern rendition of your story! I love writing stories in styles similar to this piece of yours, so that might be biased, but it is definitely an interesting read nonetheless! I really like how you incorporated a lot of similar notes in your own story with the story you were inspired by. I found a lot of key points in your story which made it really easy to understand where and how you were inspired for your writing. I also enjoyed the quick plot set-up, climax, and resolution, as it made it a nice quick read and not one that is dragged out. Great job.
Hi Cade! I really enjoyed reading your story. It was quick and to the point, plus there was a good background that gave me some insight as to why the boy wandered into the woods each day by himself. For some reason, this story feels a little incomplete to me. I loved the way you wrote it and everything but the ending seems very rushed. I think if you add maybe one more paragraph to the end explaining how things turned out or something, the story would feel a bit more complete instead of just stopping suddenly. Overall, I think you did a great job though!
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